Friday, November 26, 2010
Feedback on my second essay
Essay 2 has definitely been an adventure. It has been a learning experience but I feel I may have fallen into many of the pitfalls that plagued me in essay 1. Obviously this time I play to change these shortcomings later, it is only my first draft. That being said, I need my readers to focus in on a couple aspects of my paper. The first area is conciseness. Is what I am saying really relevant to my overall work? The second aspect I need my readers to watch are empty adjectives. Am I using useless superlatives like: “astronomically” or “amazingly”. Definitely feel free to write about whatever area you wish to in my paper. Just make sure you put some focus on those two areas. Thank you in advance for your feedback.
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my paper has giving me some of the same problems i experienced in essay 1 as well, so you are not alone in that aspect. we will survive though, and your paper sounds great so far! i hope you had a great Thanksgiving holiday and all that good stuff! :D
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